Many scientists believe that now we can study the behavior of a three-year-old child to see whether they will grow up to be criminals. To what extent do you think crime is determined by human nature？Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?
IELTS Writing Task 2 : Opinion Essay
Sample Answer 1: Band 8
Brain study has progressed significantly in the last decade. The human brain controls the functioning of the entire system and emotions are just a byproduct of the chemical activity in the brain. So, it is no wonder that scientists claim that they can predict the propensity for criminal activities in a child by studying his/her brain at the early age of 3. Though external factors influence a child’s behavior, innate qualities decide the character. So it is very right that scientific study of the brain can identify criminals at a tender age. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall delve deep into how brain study will help parents raise children in the right manner.
We have innumerous examples to show that a child need not be like his parent. A child born to a criminal may be a morally righteous person. A child born to good parents may involve in unlawful activities. So, it is the brain that decides the character and not the upbringing. In the present century, we are gifted with the option of conducting a brain analysis to determine the right way of taking care of a child.
Once it is detected that the child has an inclination towards crime, parents can decide the kind of education and nurturing they should receive. Parents can ensure that the child is taught the importance of moral values. They can also teach him/her about the consequences of breaking the law and instill a sense of fear for doing something wrong in the eyes of the law. They can also watch their peer group and, in fact, form one for him/her so that good people influence them. Having prior knowledge of the child’s penchant will help the parent guide him in the right direction.
In conclusion, if scientific studies can determine the likelihood of criminal tendencies in a child. Parents should make use of this scientific development and decide the mode of children’s upbringing to stop them from becoming criminals.
Structure of the essay
You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,
• Do you agree that we can study the behavior of a three-year-old child to see whether
they will grow up to be criminals?
(or)
• Do you disagree that we can study the behavior of a three-year-old child to see whether
they will grow up to be criminals?
Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.
Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.
Question Paraphrased – Brain study has progressed significantly in the last decade. The human brain controls the functioning of the entire system and emotions are just a byproduct of the chemical activity in the brain. So, it is no wonder that scientists claim that they can predict the propensity for criminal activities in a child by studying his/her brain at the early age of 3.
Opinion – So it is very right that scientific study of the brain can identify criminals at a tender age.
A thesis statement – In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall delve deep into how brain study will help parents raise children in the right manner.
Body Paragraph 1:
Topic: Central idea: Children need not be like their parents
Supporting points:
• Brain decides the character.
• Brain study can decide the mode of upbringing
Body Paragraph 2:
Topic: Central idea: Steps that parents can take based on brain study
Supporting points:
• Teach moral values
• Instill fear for doing something unlawful
• Decide the peer group
Conclusion:
Reiterated that science can predict criminal tendencies in a child and decide the way a child should be raised to stop him/her from becoming a criminal.
