IELTS Writing task 2

Sample Answer 1: Band 8

Environmental pollution is a major threat that society is confronting now. Some are of the opinion that raising the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles will help. They believe that this move would prevent people from buying and using cars, which will minimize the hazardous effects of pollution. I think this idea is baseless. There are many other practical solutions to the problem. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why this is not an effective move and outline the alternatives.

Primarily, increasing the cost of fuel has dangerous consequences. Transportation costs will increase, which means the prices of essential commodities will increase. The value of the rupee will start depreciating, which is of grave concern. There are several alternative measures that could be taken rather than increasing fuel costs. For instance, biodiesel, a renewable fuel made from vegetable oils and animal fats, could be advocated. Electric cars are another option. Fuel from hydrogen, natural gas, propane, or liquefied petroleum gas is also effective fuel alternatives. All these emit low levels of gases into the atmosphere.

An increase in fuel prices is a sign of a weak economy. Banks may increase lending rates. It is an indirect tax burden on the citizens of the country. It is an indirect hint of our situation to the global community, and we may be forced to yield to the interests of superior powers. The cost of living will increase. As a result, businesses will cut down costs which will lead to an economic recession.

Even though it is true that we have to reduce using cars that pollute the environment, resorting to alternative sources of energy is more of a win-win situation.

In conclusion, raising fuel costs will not solve environmental problems. Instead, awareness of alternate sources of petrol should be created, and people should be encouraged to use them.

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Structure of the essay

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that it is one of the best ways to solve environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles?

(or)

• Do you disagree with the idea that it is one of the best ways to solve environmental problems by increasing the cost of fuels for cars and other vehicles?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – Environmental pollution is a major threat that society is confronting now. Some are of the opinion that raising the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles will help. They believe that this move would prevent people from buying and using cars, which will minimize the hazardous effects of pollution.

Opinion – I completely agree with this idea.

A thesis statement – In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why this is not an effective move and outline the alternatives.

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Consequences of increasing fuel costs and possible alternatives.

Supporting points:

• Increase in fuel costs increases the price of essential commodities
• Value of rupee depreciates
• Biodiesel, electric cars, fuel from hydrogen, propane, and natural gas are alternative fuels

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: Reasons for resorting to fast foods and their negative impact on lifestyle

Supporting points:

• Sign of weak economy
• Hints our situation to the world
• Cost of living increases
• Economic recession

Conclusion:

Reiterated that instead of raising fuel prices which will lead to dangerous consequences, people should be encouraged to use alternate sources of fuel.

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Sample Answer 1: Band 8

Fast foods have conquered our lives. The younger generation has fallen for it. Due to their palatable taste, people are craving for it. Our dietary habits have undergone a significant change, and we have become more prone to health problems. I’m also of the same opinion, and I shall put forth my arguments in the forthcoming paragraphs.

Primarily, the local food joints selling pakoras, samosas, and vada pavs don’t use good quality oil. They are prepared under unhygienic conditions. They are tasty but have severe health impacts, such as damage to the liver, heart, and an increase in bad cholesterol. People are attracted to them despite knowing the consequences. They are eaten for pleasure and have become the favourite noontime snack for many. They have indeed become a part of the diet.

Packaged foods are no less in causing health problems. They are priced heavily, and people don’t hesitate to spend on them. The primary reason for buying packaged foods is laziness. With almost a significant population working to earn a living, they lack time and energy to cook at home. So they resort to alternatives like packaged foods. They are unaware of the ingredients used to prepare them. Over a period of time, lack of physical activity and consumption of these foods rich in fat will lead to serious health complications like obesity. In the olden days, people ate home-cooked meals, and the average lifespan was 80. Now it has come down to 60.

Although the fast-paced life has pushed people into fast food, people should try to come out of this addiction.

In conclusion, it is without a doubt that the consumption of fast foods has a damaging effect on our health in the long run.

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Structure of the essay

 

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that fast food has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet?

(or)

• Do you disagree with the idea that fast food has bad effects on our lifestyles and diet?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – Fast foods have conquered our lives. The younger generation has fallen for it. Due to their palatable taste, people are craving for it. Our dietary habits have undergone a significant change, and we have become more prone to health problems.

Opinion – I completely agree with this idea.

A thesis statement – I’m also of the same opinion, and I shall put forth my arguments in the forthcoming paragraphs.

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Fast foods have changed dietary habits and have a damaging effect on health.s

Supporting points:

• Are very tasty
• Causes diseases related to heart and liver
• Eaten for pleasure
• Become favourite noontime snack
• Become part of the diet

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: Reasons for resorting to fast foods and their negative impact on lifestyle

Supporting points:

• Laziness to cook at home
• Leads to conditions like obesity
• Reduced the average lifespan of people

Conclusion:

Reiterated the negative impact of fast foods on health.

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Sample Answer 1: Band 8

International aid is the transfer of goods or services from a country or international organization to benefit another country. Support can be economical or humanitarian. Some think that their government should not spend on international aid because there are underprivileged people in their own country. I completely agree with this idea. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why countries should give priority to their internal problems.

Firstly, a developed country should examine its debt ceiling before volunteering to help other countries. The US is a classic example. According to a survey, the US national debt was about $26 trillion in June 2020. It has increased to almost 800% of what it was in 1989. This would bring down the value of the dollar and impact negatively on the economy and international investments. Eventually, it would aggravate the unemployment problem within the country. So it is high time that the nation concentrated on reducing its debts rather than contributing to international aid. If these countries continue to fund other nations, it will cause serious social unrest within their country.

There is no evidence that the countries receiving foreign aid are progressing economically. Also, according to a survey, foreign aid consumes a considerable amount in the budget which can be used for the nation’s welfare. Furthermore, the countries receiving support are not committed to remaining loyal to the donor country in times of crisis and may not yield to the donor’s interests. Donor countries also need to be wary of the fact that they contribute only their share and don’t overdo the aid.

Despite the fact that developed countries should be merciful on third-world countries, I feel that intra-governmental development should gain priority over helping others.

In conclusion, though it is deemed merciless to stop funding the underdeveloped countries, it should be noted that solving the intragovernmental problems in a developed country is of more importance. Only a self-sustained country will be able to donate generously to other countries.

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Structure of the essay

 

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that the government should not spend on international aid because there are disadvantaged people in their country, such as the unemployed and homeless?

(or)

• Do you disagree with the idea that the government should not spend on international aid because there are disadvantaged people in their country, such as the unemployed and homeless?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – International aid is the transfer of goods or services from a country or international organization to benefit another country. Support can be economical or humanitarian. Some think that their government should not spend on international aid because they are underprivileged people in their own country.

Opinion – I completely agree with this idea.

A thesis statement – In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why countries should give priority to their internal problems.

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Importance of analyzing the intra governmental problems

Supporting points:

• Examining one’s own debt ceiling
• Monitoring the currency value
• Monitoring the economy and international investments
• Consequences of making donations without concentrating on intra governmental problems

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: International aid does not help in any manner

Supporting points:

• The poor countries don’t’ show significant progress
• The countries receiving aid may not remain loyal to the donor
• The countries receiving aid may not comply to the donor’s interests

Conclusion:

Reiterated that intra governmental problems should be given priority over helping other countries.

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Sample Answer 1: Band 8

A university offers courses that help students gain knowledge on a particular discipline and prepare them for a career. So it is not surprising that some of them feel students should be devoted to studies. But others argue that it is equally important to take part in other activities. I believe that students should acquire overall development. The university should concentrate not only on meeting industry demands but also on helping students be involved in other activities. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss both sides and explain how taking part
in different activities is beneficial to the students.

A student who limits himself only to academics is a frog in a well. They will be the odd ones out in society at a later point in time. Being bookish will not help in any manner. One has to devote time to developing other talents as well. There are innumerous examples of engineering students pursuing careers as a singer, actor or sportsman. Since it is tough to predict the future, there is no need to confine oneself solely to studies. A student passionate about singing may fondly recall his live performances in university than the time spent in the classroom. The live
performances would have helped in some manner (such as removing stage fear).

One should not join a university for the sole purpose of procuring a career. There are many other facets of university life which one has to sense and appreciate. For example, a student taking part in inter-college events like a symposium will gain knowledge, build communication abilities and win more contacts which may help him in becoming successful in an interview and career as well.

Devoting time to other activities helps the person acquire overall development, albeit the primary reason to join a university is to study.

In conclusion, though it is important to concentrate on studies, one need not get trapped in the classroom. They should make time to pursue other talents beyond the curriculum as well.

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Structure of the essay

 

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities?

(or)

• Do you disagree with the idea that it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – A university offers courses that help students gain knowledge on a particular discipline and prepare them for a career. So it is not surprising that some of them feel students should be devoted to studies. But others argue that it is equally important to take part in other activities.

Opinion – I believe that students should acquire overall development

A thesis statement – In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall discuss both sides and explain how taking part in different activities is beneficial to the students

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Importance of taking part in other activities

Supporting points:

• Confining oneself to the classroom does not help in the long run
• Tough to predict one’s career path
• Other activities do help in some manner [Eg: removing stage fear]

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: Benefits of participating in outside activities

Supporting points:

• Gains knowledge
• Builds communication abilities
• Wins contacts

Conclusion:

Reiterated that since nobody can predict the career path, there is no need to confine oneself to the classroom. They should create time to pursue other activities as well.

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Sample Answer 1: Band 8

Underdeveloped countries receive a substantial amount of aid from developed countries. But, it is interesting to note that this measure has not eradicated poverty in the nations receiving support. So people have started thinking that financial aid must be substituted with other forms of assistance. I strongly believe in the latter point of view. In the following paragraphs, I shall explain how emergent nations can prosper with other forms of aid.

Primarily, monetary assistance cannot alleviate the deep-rooted problems in underdeveloped nations. For example, the world bank may spend generously on country A. But the country’s political environment may not be stable. So the funds may not reach the poor. The government may introduce namesake development programs that don’t help the people. Moreover, the country may have unresolved social problems. Eventually, the country will continue to remain poor despite receiving huge amounts of aid. So it is high time that developed nations resort to other forms of assistance in these countries.

Primarily, they must invest in education and healthcare. Young people should receive a quality education. Everyone should have access to proper medical treatment. Education will help eradicate unemployment and prevent people from resorting to unlawful activities. So developed countries must help in building good schools, universities, and hospitals. Moreover, they can help stabilize the government in these countries and monitor whether the political environment is conducive to growth.

Although monetary helps in feeding the hungry lot, it is only a temporary solution.

In summary, mere financial aid will not help in developing a country. The right form of assistance must be decided after a thorough analysis of the country’s social, economic, climatic, and political conditions.

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Structure of the essay

 

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that rich countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid?

(or)

• Do you disagree that rich countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – Underdeveloped countries receive a substantial amount of aid from developed countries. But, it is interesting to note that this measure has not eradicated poverty in the nations receiving support. So people have started thinking that financial aid must be substituted with other forms of assistance.

Opinion – I strongly believe in the latter point of view.

A thesis statement – In the following paragraphs, I shall explain how emergent nations can prosper with other forms of aid.

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Why financial aid fails to help?

Supporting points:

• Unstable political environment.
• Introduction of namesake programs
• Unresolved social problems

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: Alternatives that can help

Supporting points:

• Investment in education and healthcare
• Monitoring political conditions

Conclusion:

Reiterated that type of aid must be decided after an in-depth study of the country and just financing is of no help.

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Sample Answer 1: Band 8

In recent times, there has been a surge in traffic in cities. Some people think that one practical solution to this problem is to stop suburban and rural people from moving to cities. I completely agree with this statement. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall put forth the arguments in favor of my opinion.

Primarily, cities are jam-packed. They have reached their point of saturation. It has become challenging to find the way during peak hours of traffic. Industrialization and urbanization are the primary reasons for traffic congestion in cities. So, moving people from the countryside to cities will prove to be a catastrophe. Since people move to cities for a better lifestyle, there will be an increase in the number of cars which will increase the carbon footprint, thereby leading to problems like global warming. Real estate prices have already skyrocketed due to the demand for living spaces. According to a survey, Bangalore has the monstrous traffic jams in the world. On average, Bengalureans driving during peak hours ends up wasting an extra 243 hours, i.e., ten days, 3 hours in traffic each year. Another interesting thing is that companies have considered opening up office spaces in the countryside owing to its calm atmosphere and fewer traffic problems.

Due to overcrowding, there may be a sudden increase in the number of accidents that occur on roads. Many people who don’t find a seat in public transport will travel on footboards and may fall when the vehicle stops suddenly. Two-wheelers who want to escape slow-moving traffic may be hit by cars. People rushing to catch a train may be injured due to stampedes.

Even though moving from the countryside to the city is viewed as a sign of an improved lifestyle, the truth is that it is linked to dangerous consequences like a hike in real estate prices apart from causing traffic congestion. In fact, the trend is reversing now with companies moving to the countryside for a better environment.

In conclusion, moving people from the countryside to cities will fuel the already burning traffic problems. So it is absolutely right that we discourage them from moving to cities.

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Structure of the essay

 

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that the most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to discourage people from the suburbs or the countryside from moving to the cities?

(or)

• Do you disagree with the idea that the most effective way to solve traffic and transport problems in the cities is to discourage people from the suburbs or the countryside from moving to the cities?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – In recent times, there has been a surge in traffic in cities. Some people think that one practical solution to this problem is to stop suburban and rural people from moving to cities.

Opinion – I completely agree with this statement.

A thesis statement – In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall put forth the arguments in favor of my opinion.

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Existing traffic problems in cities and negative consequences of moving from rural areas to cities.

Supporting points:

• Traffic congestion in cities has already reached the saturation point.
• People will buy more cars increasing environmental problems
• Hike in real estate prices

Supporting example:

• Statistics of Bangalore traffic

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: Problems due to overcrowding

Supporting points:

• Accidents may increase
• People may become prey to stampede

Conclusion:

Reiterated that it is right to discourage people from rural areas from moving to cities and supported the side taken in the introduction.

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Sample Answer 1: Band 8

In the olden days, newspapers and television were the only source of information for people. But now, times have changed. The internet has gained a monopoly in this domain. Newspapers and television are swept away by the giant tide of the internet. In my opinion, this is not a positive development. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain the reasons for the same.

Primarily, newspapers are authentic sources of information. If they mishandle the content, they are liable to be sued in a defamation case. So they are more likely to be responsible when writing news. News writers are supposed to write in good language. So the reader’s knowledge of the language improves over a period of time. Besides, they also have crosswords, puzzles, and various other things apart from news. Also, they have a column where the reader can pen his views. So, it gives the chance for the reader to ponder over social issues and make his contribution; however small it may be. They have a dedicated column for children which is proven to improve language abilities. These are the primary reasons why schools force children to read newspapers.

Regarding TV channels, they are also bound by rules and regulations. So they cannot telecast forged content. A person gets to see the critical discussions in parliament, which is very useful in gaining knowledge about the stands of various political parties on burning issues.

On the other hand, the news on the internet is instant. The writers have unlimited freedom to write whatever they want on a particular issue. Online communication is dominating because of its capability to reach the masses within a very short time. The content is also small, well-suited to readers who surf news on their mobile and don’t have the patience to read large volumes of content.

Even though online news is succinct and reaches people at the speed of lightning, its content is not trustworthy. They are not bound by any laws and news authors are not held responsible for mistakes.

To summarise, though online news is gaining popularity due to its crisp content, they are no match to the authentic information by newspapers and television channels.

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Structure of the essay

 

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that it is a positive development?

(or)

• Do you disagree with the idea that it is a positive development?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – In the olden days, newspapers and television were the
only source of information for people. But now, times have changed. The internet has gained a
monopoly in this domain. Newspapers and television are swept away by the giant tide of the
internet.

Opinion – In my opinion, this is not a positive development.

A thesis statement – In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain the reasons for the same.

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Importance and benefits of newspapers and tv channels

Supporting points:

• Authentic sources of information
• Writers held responsible for content
• Bound by laws
• Improves language abilities of the readers
• Telecasts of parliamentary discussions help the common man gain information on stands taken by various political parties.

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: Advantages of online news

Supporting points:

• Instant updates
• Reaches the masses in no time
• Succinct content for mobile readers

Conclusion:

Reiterated that though online content is succinct and reaches the masses in less time, newspapers and television channels are under compulsion to produce authentic news due to the fact that they are answerable to the law.

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Sample Answer 1: Band 8

Of late, there is a loud uproar over the money spent on conserving wildlife. But I strongly disagree and feel it is too much of a fuss. Wild animals and birds are an invaluable gift from God, and humans are vested with the responsibility of saving them. Many of them are on the verge of extinction, and I believe that we are spending the right amount of money to preserve them. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why it is appropriate to spend money on conserving wildlife.

Primarily, they play a pivotal role in the proper functioning of the ecosystem. There are countless examples of how a decrease or increase in a particular animal species affects humankind. For example, bees help in transferring pollen grains. If bees are reduced in number, there would be low crop yields due to the dearth of pollination. Another classic example would be tigers, which are dangerously decreasing in number. Due to the decrease in tigers, the deer population may increase. Deers feed on grass. Increased grazing will lead to loss of habitat for many other species. Also, the deers may venture out from forests to cities and towns for
food. Thus, it is imperative to conserve wildlife.

Some species are unique to a particular place. For example, kangaroos are famous in Australia. Kangaroos bring in a lot of revenue in the form of visitors. Some species help in maintaining the health of the soil, which is of great help to farmers. For example, the earthworm feeds on plant and animal wastes, decomposes them, and releases chemicals that restore the soil’s nutrients. Man has caused so many problems to wildlife in the form of hunting, poaching, and deforestation. Man derives innumerous benefits from animals. So, the amount spent on them is comparatively less. So, people who claim that we are spending too much money on wildlife conservation have to sink their differences and help build a good ecosystem.

In conclusion, money spent on the conservation of wildlife is vindicated. Any step taken towards this cause should be appreciated.

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Structure of the essay

 

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of
wild animals and birds?

(or)

• Do you disagree with the idea that too many resources and attention are devoted to the
protection of wild animals and birds?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – Of late, there is a loud uproar over the money spent on conserving wildlife.

Opinion – But I strongly disagree and feel it is too much of a fuss. Many of them are on the verge of extinction, and I believe that we are spending the right amount of money for
preserving them.

A thesis statement – In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall explain why it is appropriate to spend money on conserving wildlife.

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Importance of conserving wildlife

Supporting points:

• To maintain ecological equilibrium
• Increase or decrease in a particular species adversely affects the ecosystem

Supporting example:

• Bees help in pollen transfer

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: How wildlife helps mankind

Supporting points:

• Kangaroos generate revenue by attracting visitors
• Earthworm cleans the soil

Conclusion:

Reiterated that money spent on wildlife conservation is justified and supported the side taken in the introduction.

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Sample Answer 1: Band 8

Almost every country in the world is struggling to meet its food demands without depending on others. Food security means ensuring all citizens have access to nutritious food. In times of international food crisis, we cannot rely on imports. So, it is imperative that every country drafts its own plans for self-sufficiency in food production. I’m in complete agreement with this idea. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall expound my thoughts in detail.

Primarily, a food crisis hikes food prices which may lead to social problems within a country. For example, the international food crisis which occurred in 2007-08 proved that food insecurity is linked to dangerous consequences. According to a survey, the global community is at risk of confronting a severe food challenge by 2050 because we have to feed 9 billion people.

Improving the agricultural sector impacts positively on the country’s economy. It creates jobs for the unemployed and helps in eradicating poverty. If crops are produced in surplus, it increases exports. Food security also increases the brand image of the country in the international arena owing to increased stability. If we can produce nutritious food in a self-sustained manner, we will be building a healthy community.

In times of war-like situations, international trade may be banned. So countries which depend solely on imports for feeding its population will suffer badly. Stored food reserves will be helpful in times of natural disasters like earthquakes. Moreover, the dangerous preservatives used in imported foods to make them last long impact negatively on health.

In conclusion, food security is indeed the need of the hour. It is a sign of an improved economy and also a solution for many chronic problems within a country.

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Structure of the essay

 

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that Countries should produce the food that their population eats, and
import as little as possible?

(or)

• Do you disagree with the idea that Countries should produce the food that their
population eats, and import as little as possible?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – Almost every country in the world is struggling to meet its food demands without depending on others. Food security means ensuring all citizens have access to nutritious food. In times of international food crisis, we cannot rely on imports. So, it is imperative that every country drafts its own plans for self-sufficiency in food production.

Opinion – I’m in complete agreement with this idea.

A thesis statement – In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall expound my thoughts in detail.

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Dangerous consequences of food insecurity

Supporting points:

• Hike in food prices
• social unrest within the country

Supporting evidence:

• International food crisis in 2007-08

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: Benefits of food security

Supporting points:

• Increased employment opportunities
• Positive impact on the economy
• Increases trade opportunities
• Increased stability

Body Paragraph 3:

Topic: Central idea: Benefits of food security

Supporting points:

• Stored food reserves help in times of uncertainty
• Imported foods are unhealthy

Conclusion:

Reiterated the importance of food security and supported the side taken in the introduction.

For example: In conclusion, food security is indeed the need of the hour. It is a sign of an
improved economy and also a solution for many chronic problems within a country.

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Sample Answer 1: Band 8

Brain study has progressed significantly in the last decade. The human brain controls the functioning of the entire system and emotions are just a byproduct of the chemical activity in the brain. So, it is no wonder that scientists claim that they can predict the propensity for criminal activities in a child by studying his/her brain at the early age of 3. Though external factors influence a child’s behavior, innate qualities decide the character. So it is very right that scientific study of the brain can identify criminals at a tender age. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall delve deep into how brain study will help parents raise children in the right manner.

We have innumerous examples to show that a child need not be like his parent. A child born to a criminal may be a morally righteous person. A child born to good parents may involve in unlawful activities. So, it is the brain that decides the character and not the upbringing. In the present century, we are gifted with the option of conducting a brain analysis to determine the right way of taking care of a child.

Once it is detected that the child has an inclination towards crime, parents can decide the kind of education and nurturing they should receive. Parents can ensure that the child is taught the importance of moral values. They can also teach him/her about the consequences of breaking the law and instill a sense of fear for doing something wrong in the eyes of the law. They can also watch their peer group and, in fact, form one for him/her so that good people influence them. Having prior knowledge of the child’s penchant will help the parent guide him in the right direction.

In conclusion, if scientific studies can determine the likelihood of criminal tendencies in a child. Parents should make use of this scientific development and decide the mode of children’s upbringing to stop them from becoming criminals.

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Structure of the essay

 

You were given an opinion essay which means you had to pick the side. So,

• Do you agree that we can study the behavior of a three-year-old child to see whether
they will grow up to be criminals?

(or)

• Do you disagree that we can study the behavior of a three-year-old child to see whether
they will grow up to be criminals?

Once you pick the side, you can start planning your essay and then writing it.

Don’t forget to state your opinion on it.

Question Paraphrased – Brain study has progressed significantly in the last decade. The human brain controls the functioning of the entire system and emotions are just a byproduct of the chemical activity in the brain. So, it is no wonder that scientists claim that they can predict the propensity for criminal activities in a child by studying his/her brain at the early age of 3.

Opinion – So it is very right that scientific study of the brain can identify criminals at a tender age.

A thesis statement – In the forthcoming paragraphs, I shall delve deep into how brain study will help parents raise children in the right manner.

Body Paragraph 1:

Topic: Central idea: Children need not be like their parents

Supporting points:

• Brain decides the character.
• Brain study can decide the mode of upbringing

Body Paragraph 2:

Topic: Central idea: Steps that parents can take based on brain study

Supporting points:

• Teach moral values
• Instill fear for doing something unlawful
• Decide the peer group

Conclusion:

Reiterated that science can predict criminal tendencies in a child and decide the way a child should be raised to stop him/her from becoming a criminal.

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